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Hello, my name is Ines Peter. Hoping for a good day, I want to welcome you.
We start our tour at the bus station “Drummer Street”. First I want to show you “Whipple Museum” and give you some background information. “Whipple Museum” is a history of science museum and it’s open from Monday to Friday from 12:30 a.m. to 4:30 p.m. The admission is free.

I think that’s enough information for now.
During the walk I want to give you some information about Cambridge. Cambridge is first founded in 1630, but the important history started in 1902, when Americans occupy Cambrige.
We have reached Nowning Street now. As soon as we get to the museum, you will get the time to eat something in the eatery nearby. After that little stop we walk along “Prembroke Street” to “Corpus Christi College”, which was founded in 1352. If you’re interested, there is a nice court in the middle that I could show you. Beside the college there is a very good restaurant, despite the small prices.

In the afternoon, let’s say 2 p.m., we will meet again.

Hello, welcome back. Now let’s go on the market, for doing some shopping.
I can see your bags, let’s move on to “Trinity College” which is very famous. It’s very old and inside it’s amazing, but we haven’t got enough time to look at this gorgeous house.

Now we walk along “Jesus Lane” to our next stop “Wesley House” which houses the Methodist university.
It’s a fact that John Paul II was studying theology at this place.
Follow me to the last stop, the biggest shopping centre in Cambridge.
It houses every shop you can think of. Get our money out, there are enough shops for everyone, guys.
Please come back to this place in two and a half hours. We are going to finish our tour then.
Welcome back! We need about ten minutes to get back to the bus station.
Here we are.

I hope you will have a great holiday in Cambridge and I want to thank for this great day.